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Fall And Falling

Autumn seems to fall a little less every year, adding to winters might,
While cigarettes burn more vivid and clear, then the stars that once blazed so bright,
Time ever fleeting once crawled so slow, that wasting it was time well spent,
Heartbreaks I thought I would never let go, now just poetry left unsent,
These are the thoughts that go through my head, in a fall that’s barely falling,
What's left to die, seems already dead, upon winters early calling,
But still I sit, to watch the leaves crawl, and listen to the eerie sound,
Of the many voices of a dying Fall, skittering upon the ground,
And as they run over the frozen cement, to gather at my feet,
I hear Fall die, and start to lament, Autumns unjust and untimely defeat,
For though most seasons will come anew, with each turn of the sun,
I knew Falls days were numbered and few, a battle that couldn't be won,
Autumn seems to fall a little less every year, till one day it didn't show,
Summer and Winter now never so near, but no one but me would know,
For only I could see it's rapid decline, and hear its mournful crying,
For mixed in the words of Fall's and mine, was the fact that we were both dying…
©2008-2009 ~Unbeliever18
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Author's Comments

21 is not old. But sitting in the back of Eric's truck, a cigarette in one hand, and a beer in the other, I realized as he spoke of how dim the stars are then when he was a kid, that mine are too. I'm not old, and I don't expect to die any time soon. But I am aware that I'm older and in a different point in my life. Moved out, living with my girl friend, paying bills, realizing that toliet paper doesn't just magically appear in the bathroom, but you have to actually buy it. So anyways, though this is a sad poem, steemed from a sad thought of dying, I'm not sad, but actually kind of happy that I can still rhyme, yay me.

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:icontehsockrocker:
I have to say that you are amazing. I love this poem.

And what do you know - toilet paper DOES appear for you, since I buy it. xDDD

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You don't need shoes! In my day, we had to walk 20 miles in the snow just to get to our shoes!
:iconiimonkeefunkii:
That was intense and at the same time very soothing. The subjects were very extreme of each other. Autumn was the soothing part, dynig was the intense part. Every line you did was delivered ... just right. Like always a very good poem. The first line caught me and you brilliantly used it again near the end. Whooooohoo!!!

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Brother's art.
:iconunbeliever18:
Yea, I was writing something else at the time, using that first line in the middle, but it just seemed like a good opening line, that it needed its own poem. So I used it for this one, and trashed the other. I'm glad you liked it.

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I wanted to feel bitter, but I couldn't muster that now, I knew within a moment I would fall in love, within her arms my walls would melt, and my heart would be exposed, I wanted to be bitter, but instead I held her tighter... and let the night unfold...
:iconunbeliever18:
That may be so, but I did buy it one time, and the realization still haunts me.

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I wanted to feel bitter, but I couldn't muster that now, I knew within a moment I would fall in love, within her arms my walls would melt, and my heart would be exposed, I wanted to be bitter, but instead I held her tighter... and let the night unfold...
:iconiimonkeefunkii:
I always, always like your poetry. =)

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Brother's art.
:icontehsockrocker:
*sticks tongue out*

If it haunts you, imagine what I must feel! xP

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You don't need shoes! In my day, we had to walk 20 miles in the snow just to get to our shoes!
:iconred-the-warrior:
I really like the flow of this, it sounds pretty and sad. It reminds me of the type of poems I used to read as a kid, it has a kind of classical feel.
:iconunbeliever18:
Thanks, I'm glad you liked it. In this one particularly I really tried to make it smooth and flowing due to the topic, I'm happy it came off that way.

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I wanted to feel bitter, but I couldn't muster that now, I knew within a moment I would fall in love, within her arms my walls would melt, and my heart would be exposed, I wanted to be bitter, but instead I held her tighter... and let the night unfold...

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